Breaking in Outside of Hollywood Webinar

breaking in outside of hollywoodIt’s not often that I will actually recommend anyone attend a screenwriting workshop or seminar. Today however, I will recommend a screenwriting webinar. What’s a webinar? A seminar held completely online. What’s THIS webinar about?

Breaking in Outside of Hollywood

Here’s why I am going to PERSONALLY recommend this webinar to you if you live outside Hollywood… Jeanne Veillette Bowerman is the instructor and trust me… She KNOWS what she’s talking about when it comes to networking if you live outside Hollywood. Need more convincing? No problem. Take a look at Jeanne’s Balls of Steel column on Script’s website. Read through some of her articles. She’s not trying to teach you how to write a screenplay… She’s showing you how to launch your screenwriting career WITHOUT having to move to Los Angeles which is a HUGE part of this game. Gone are the days of writing a great screenplay and waiting for Hollywood to knock on your door.

I also recommend signing up for a Twitter account if you don’t already have one and then IMMEDIATELY FOLLOW Jeanne after doing so. She goes by @jeannevb over there and she’s very generous when it comes to sharing her knowledge about breaking in outside of Hollywood. Not only that, she’s just plain fun to talk to.

Last but not least…

I broke into Hollywood from outside Hollywood. If I can do it, it can be done but it took me a hell of a lot of trial and error… Trust me on that. Jeanne will definitely jump start your foray into this business from outside of Hollywood if you’ve got a mind to do so but with a lot LESS trial and error.

Breaking in Outside of Hollywood Webinar
Session Date: Tuesday, January 17, 2012
Session Start Time: 1:00pm PST
Duration: 90 minutes

Subtext in Your Screenplay Part 2 Dialogue

emotionsIn Part 1, I pointed out that you really need to give your actors something to work with when it comes to the dialogue you’re giving your characters…

That “something to work with” is subtext.

Subtext will help a reader, a producer, a director, and an actor distinguish WHO your characters are. There’s an old trick that’s been around a long time that explains how to check your character’s dialogue to see if it’s any good… To see if we can actually TELL who’s speaking. Just cover up the character cue (character’s name) in your screenplay and see if you can tell who’s actually speaking the dialogue.

There’s MERIT in that trick…

Unfortunately, a lot of screenwriters trying to break in simply don’t get it. They think that the actor should take care of all that INTERPRETATION and make each character distinguishable.

I’ve even received emails complaining that a lot of movies today have characters that sound a lot alike, “So why can’t I”?

You can.

Go ahead.

Everybody else is doing it so why not you?

But for those of us that do NOT want to venture down that path… Just HOW do you do that? I’m sure there are a lot of different ways to go about it but if you’re struggling for a technique you can get your mind around, let me go back to giving each of your main characters a theme… Hell, I try to give every character his or her own theme but I highly recommend it with your main characters.

Now understand… I am NOT talking about the theme of your story. Although your characters could certainly have their own themes that coincide with the theme of your story. What I am talking about is taking each one of your characters and giving them their own theme. Before you start shaking your head, just sit there for a minute and think about people you know. Family. Friends. Associates. Take one of them and boil their ESSENCE down to a theme and guess what?

It doesn’t have to be correct.

But it can be a lot of fun when it comes to exploring your story and the characters that hold it up.

In the last spec script I wrote, one of my main characters is a woman. A mother who’s children were killed and she is hell-bent on revenge hence, ANGER is her theme — see the chart below on basic emotions.

It is her theme — her anger and wanting REVENGE (vengefulness) — that drives her through the entire story. Every decision she makes is based on getting her just a little closer to succeeding with her revenge. Likewise, it’s this same theme of anger that drives her dialogue. She will let nothing stand in her way and she’s not afraid to reveal that with every word she speaks.

Take a look at the Primary emotion of ANGER in the chart. ANGER is where my female character began. ANGER was her theme. Anger made her the character she is in my screenplay. To the right of that primary emotion are both the Secondary and Tertiary emotions IN LINE with the primary emotion of ANGER. Damn near every scene this female character is in is driven IN SOME WAY by her primary emotion of ANGER or her theme.

Can a character’s theme change in the midst of your story? Of course. Change the theme or the emotion and just make sure that your character’s dialogue reflects that change.

Aside from the subtext however, giving your characters a theme — once you get a little practice — should enable those of us that end up reading your screenplay, the ability to read your screenplay faster and actually SEE the characters more clearly in our mind’s eye.

List of Basic Emotions by Parrot

When your character speaks from his or her theme, subtext is easy — rather, it’s not as difficult as it might be without those same characters having their own theme that drives them through the story.

Your inclination as you work these emotions into your character will very likely be to write ON THE NOSE DIALOGUE and that’s okay. As I said in Part 1, you should look at on the nose dialogue as a placeholder in your first draft… During rewrite(s), take that on the nose dialogue and stand it on its ear but do so based on your character’s theme.

Another trick to giving your character their very own theme is to boil down their theme to a list of words that further identify their emotional state that you can use to help you write their dialogue. If I take the word, ANGER — and run it through my favorite online thesaurus, I get the following synonyms:

a transient madness, acedia, affront, aggravate, angriness, annoy, annoyance, antagonism, ardency, ardor, arouse, asperity, avarice, avaritia, bad humor, bad temper, bile, biliousness, blow up, boil, boil over, bridle, bridle up, bristle, bristle up, burn, causticity, chafe, choler, corrosiveness, dander, deadly sin, discontent, displease, displeasure, dudgeon, dutch, eagerness, enrage, enragement, envy, exasperate, exasperation, excite, excitement, fervency, fervidity, fervidness, fervor, flare up, flip out, fret, fury, gall, get mad, get sore, gluttony, grapes of wrath, greed, gula, heat, hit the ceiling, huff, ill humor, ill nature, ill temper, incense, incite, indignation, inflame, infuriate, infuriation, invidia, ira, irateness, ire, irk, irritability, irritate, irritation, kindle, love, lust, luxuria, mad, madden, make angry, make mad, make sore, monkey, nettle, offend, outrage, pet, pique, pride, provoke, rage, rant, rave, reach boiling point, resentment, rile, saeva indignatio, see red, seethe, sexual desire, sloth, soreness, sourness, spleen, steam up, stew, storm, superbia, temper, tick off, umbrage, vex, vexation, vials of wrath, wrath, wrathfulness

Will I use all these… Nope. But I do like to boil that list down to some tasty words that I know my character is FEELING:

a transient madness, affront, aggravate, angriness, annoy, annoyance, antagonism, bad temper, blow up, boil over, discontent, enragement, exasperate, exasperation, excite, excitement, flare up, flip out, get mad, ill temper, infuriate, irateness, irritability, irritation, offend, outrage, pride, provoke, rage, rant, boiling point, resentment, seethe, storm, temper, wrath

I only point this out to show you what I go through to learn about my characters. Of course, they have a backstory. Of course I know where they came from and what they’ve been through prior to their being in my story. I have to know all that in order to be able to have them grow organically on the page.

Sometimes… Depending on the kind of scene you’re writing for your character, you may even want to boil that particular scene down to just ONE WORD in order to get yourself into the right frame of mind to write that character’s dialogue. You can easily pick from the emotion chart above, from the list of synonyms, or dig deeper and find just the right word that describes your character based on the scene you’re writing for them.

It is your character’s theme… The list of emotions and synonyms for those emotions that will guide you through the writing of their dialogue.

I’ve got to apologize… I thought this part would have some examples of both on the nose dialogue and turning it into subtext but I ran a little too long on this post but stay tuned if this is getting interesting to you. Examples coming up.

Unk

Subtext in Your Screenplay Part 1 Dialogue

subtext in dialogueI know… There’s probably quite a few posts and articles already out there when it comes to subtext in your screenplay. I’m hoping that I’m able to possibly throw a bit of a different spin on things…

Subtext is the deeper meaning in your dialogue, action, characters, scene, and plot.

Another piece of the puzzle so to speak. A piece of the puzzle that compliments what you already know and maybe… Just maybe gives you a little clearer picture of how subtext works and how you can start using it right away.

Since this is Part 1, let’s start with subtext in dialogue. Why? Well, since my brother died, I’ve done a lot less blogging and a lot more reading and among that reading, a lot of scripts from people trying to break in and here’s what I’m seeing…

A WAR between two old friends…

ON-THE-NOSE DIALOGUE vs. SUBTEXT IN DIALOGUE

There’s really no reason that these two old buddies of ours need to be at war with each other. In fact, from what I see, it’s almost as if many of us simply FORGET about subtext and it is in fact this missing subtext that is often the difference between a good and a bad screenplay. I’ve actually seen a lot of well written screenplays written by people trying to break in. By well written, I mean the screenplay LOOKS GOOD. It’s well formatted. It’s mostly active voice. It’s got a solid structure that works for the story. In short, it’s well written TECHNICALLY SPEAKING but it just lacks a certain OOMPH.

Often, that certain lacking oomph is subtext.

I’m a huge believer in getting that first draft out of your system. Do whatever it takes to purge it. If that means writing on the nose dialogue — SO BE IT. Let your on the nose dialogue be a PLACEHOLDER for your subtext as you make successive passes for subtext on that first draft.

Anything can be fixed if you fuck with it long enough.

Subtext in dialogue is the kind of dialogue that hooks US as we watch the movie. Good subtext often means so many different things to so many different people and in a strange way, is a lot like HIGH CONCEPT i.e., it has MASS APPEAL.

We ALL get it but we all get it for different reasons.

Here’s an explanation of how subtext can work — from the film, DONNIE BRASCO:

Don’t get me wrong… On the nose dialogue has its place in your screenplay but on the nose dialogue simply doesn’t mean a lot of different things to a lot of different people like good subtext does. Additionally, on the nose dialogue doesn’t give your eventual actors a lot to work with when it comes to them interpreting the subtext of your character. I mean, you are writing a screenplay, right? I would imagine your hope is to eventually sell said screenplay and get it made, right?

Do you really want somebody like me coming in and rewriting your dialogue so that it has the layers of subtext not only we, the audience are looking for but also the people who buy and greenlight the eventual film are looking for too?

Of course you don’t.

Chances are that your spec won’t even get to that point anyway because of what it’s MISSING.

A hell of a lot of wannabe screenwriters just plain forget that what they’re writing isn’t a novel with a different format. You’re HOPEFULLY writing a future collaboration of all kinds of people with lots of different talents that will make your written word even better.

But you gotta give them something to work with.

This is why actors ARE actors. It’s their job to take your words and fill in even more subtext than you’ve already given them… To interpret your dialogue so they SEE the character you’ve created for them to play on the big screen — but in order to do that, you’ve got to give them something to work with. On the nose dialogue simply doesn’t give them much to work with as does a character rich in subtext in both dialogue and action.

Give your character’s dialogue subtext — and the eventual actor will be much more apt to interpret what’s beneath the surface of the dialogue through body posture, gestures, rhythm, stress, and intonation. It’s through the actor’s interpretation of the subtext you’ve given your character to speak that allows what you’ve written to eventually SPEAK to your audience.

I’m sure we’ve all heard and read that one of the main reasons people attend movies is to live vicariously through the characters… Especially the Protagonist. On the nose dialogue simply does not SHARE the secrets that your characters need to have in order to be compelling. By giving your characters subtext in dialogue, you allow the reader and eventual audience to SHARE those secrets thereby increasing the vicarious living we want to live when we watch a film or movie.

This is why it helps to not only have a theme for your story but consider giving each and every one of your main characters their very own theme APART from the story’s theme. This will not only help create subtext in dialogue but helps create a natural, organic structure for your story. Once you’ve given them their own theme, help them convey their very own theme through their subtext in the dialogue you write for them. Through your character’s theme and subtext, you can also disguise your character’s exposition instead of being so blatant about it like in most of the screenplays I read… Even from Professionals.

Remember… Most people we know don’t just come right out and say what they mean.

People lie. People are vague. People beat around the bush. People try to protect themselves. People try not to disgrace themselves. People try not to humiliate themselves. People try not to let the person they are speaking to know what they’re thinking. People try not to let on that they know as much as they know.

The list goes on and on and on…

Does your character’s dialogue do this?

Examples of on the nose dialogue and subtext in dialogue in Part 2.

Unk